I always though school was essential.
Getting a B would wreck my potential.
And that being popular was cool
and I had to wear the biggest jewel.
These pressures were torrential.
These problems weren't confidential;
everyone knew that to me they were presidential.
At least i wasn't breaking the rule
I always thought.
But then I learned that my issues weren't residential.
Many girls found these thing influential
whether they attended public, private, or church school.
Now my confidence can make boys drool,
because I know that those things aren't existential.
I always thought .
I really like the message in this poem Paige! It has a strong voice. Your use of rhyme is great and I like your use of line breaks--how the last line is shorter--it creates an atmosphere of reflection and shows how you have grown. I would suggest rearranging some of the words. For example, the seventh line is a little difficult to read. If you rearranged some of the words, the poem might have better flow.
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